[Oslc-steeringcommittee] Confidential Draft OASIS Press Release

[Carol Geyer]

Rainer,
I'm happy to make all the changes you suggest, althouth, instead of editing
the subhead, I think we should change the first sentence from:

OSLC, a group committed to developing standards that enable software
lifecycle tools to share data, has become the newest ...

to:

OSLC, a group committed to standardizing the way software lifecycle tools
share data, has become the newest ...

Thanks,
Carol





On Thu, May 16, 2013 at 6:10 PM, Ersch, Rainer <rainer.ersch at siemens.com>wrote:

>  Hi Carol and StC team,****
>
> I had a look at the press release proposal and I like it very much. ****
>
> There is one thing I would like to propose a change: from my point of view
> there is a bit too much of “tool integration” rather than “integration of
> lifecycle data”. At least in the subtitle, I’d propose to change
> “Initiative for Integrating Software Lifecycle Tools” to “Initiative to
> standardize the way how Software Lifecycle Tools share data” or similar (I
> have to trust you native speakers to make proper English out of that).  I
> just realized that this is now almost the wording of the first sentence,
> which would be o.k. for me, but could be improved also from a writing style
> point of view as well. ****
>
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> Minor other remarks:****
>
> On the last sentence of the first paragraph: “Several OASIS OSLC TCs are
> planned for launch …”. People not so familiar with OASIS might not know
> what TCs are. Maybe an add-on “to work on the existing and future
> specifications” would clarify that. ****
>
> On the last sentence of the second paragraph: “…eliminates … barriers to
> software integration”. From my point of view, with OSLC we don’t shot for
> software integration in general (maybe Linked Data Platform does), but
> shouldn’t we say “…eliminates … barriers to software Lifecycle Data
> integration” (to avoid another “tool integration”). ****
>
> Please let me know what you think and feel free to change my proposal.****
>
> ** **
>
> One another note: Siemens will probably not be able to provide a quote in
> time. Mainly my fault, because I simply don’t have the time to execute our
> release process for such a quote. Sorry for that, for now we have to live
> with being only listed in the banner. ****
>
>
> Bye and have a nice day
> Rainer
>
> ****
>
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> *From:* Oslc-steeringcommittee [mailto:
> oslc-steeringcommittee-bounces at open-services.net] *On Behalf Of *Carol
> Geyer
> *Sent:* Thursday, May 16, 2013 9:45 PM
> *To:* oslc-steeringcommittee
> *Subject:* [Oslc-steeringcommittee] Confidential Draft OASIS Press Release
> ****
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> Please review the attached draft and suggest any edits you feel are needed.
> ****
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> Thanks,
> Carol
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> -- ****
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> Carol Geyer
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>
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